The Teacher's Nest

Well done boys!

It’s a very interesting text packed with information! I am happy that you use some of the new words, such as  ‘positioned, lovely place, exceptional choice , brimming with , attraction’ . You used the words very nicely!  As a reader, I really enjoyed reading it!!!

But you can make it even better. Here are my suggestions:

1.  You can use some adjectives to describe the churches and the high school. Look at activity 1 (Attractions / Explore the area).

2.  You write about Agios Haralambos. Why don’t you describe him a little? Where is it?  Why is it an attraction?  Look at activity 1.

1. It’s very nice that you talk about Akrata (Ag. Haralambos), then about Helmos and the lake BUT then you talk about Akrata again (the high school). Maybe you should read it again and put it in a more logical order.
2. How about other attractions? (Think about the Environmental centre, the gallery, the square, the memorial, the old houses, the neighborhoods). Why don’t you look at activity 1?
3. Finally, your title is a bit strange…I think that a simpler one would be better… I don’t like it so much that you talk to your readers like that…

Your job is really great and I’m sure you can make it even better!

Now, think about these and make the appropriate changes. Then correct your mistakes looking at the guidelines.

I’m sure you’ll do an excellent job!

Miss L.

Στις 31 Μαρτίου 2011 , ώρα 21:01 στην κατηγορία 1st Primary School of Akrata, eWriters project, 2010-2011, Feedback, Projects, projects 2010-2011 . Μπορείτε να παρακολουθείτε τα σχόλια στο άρθρο χρησιμοποιώντας το RSS 2.0 feed Μπορείς να πας στο τέλος και να αφήσεις σχόλιο. Το Pinging προσωρινά δεν επιτρέπεται.